|[X] A Perfect Circle by Trench Kamen (x-posted...haha)
||[Apr. 16th, 2005|10:58 pm]
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Series: Tokyo Babylon/X
Fic: A Perfect Circle
Author: Trench Kamen
Favorite: The love letter. Definitely the love letter.
General Impressions: Why do I love this so much?
Length: Sixteen long and glorious chapters, unfinished
"Who knows. Maybe Kamui and Subaru will elope and be in Hawaii by this time next week. Maybe they’ll live happily ever after in a house with a white picket fence and three kids. Kamui would make a lovely housewife."
YES, THANK YOU KEIICHI.
It isn't even funny, but I started laughing when Keiichi interrupted Yuzuriha and went into a monologue. And during the confession and attempted kiss scene. But, uh, that was funny, along with when Seishirou tells Fuuma he was "just kidding" after telling him a truth.
The dentist was dead, though. Though she was the best dentist in the district and had done an amazing job on the mess Kamui had made of Seishirou, the treatment had been unpleasant, and Seishirou was in such a poor mood that medical necessity was not a good enough excuse for the pain. For good measure, he had also ripped the head off of her daughter’s cat and had left it out in their yard at just the moment when the little girl had run outside looking for her kitty, distraught over her mother’s disappearance and wanting a little comfort and time away from the detectives in the house. It made for an amusing afternoon. I was hit with characteristic, morbid snickers (setospuppyjou knows all too well what I'm talking about) after reading this. Don't look at me like that. It was funny.
Of course, I cracked up at Kamui's little 'speech' in chapter sixteen: "...that’s it." Kamui walked down the stairs and crossed the room. "That’s it. I can’t take any more of this drama shit. I’m done. I’m leaving. I’m sick of all the relationships and the hurting and the shit and the... shit. Call me when everybody here stops sucking."
Anyway, this fic, A Perfect Circle by Trench Kamen, isn't something I should feel head-over-heels in love with, but I am. It's...off. Vaguely reminiscent in style in something I read long ago - nothing concrete, just the air - and the writing itself... I'm really enjoying it though I think that I should feel that some parts and people are totally out there. There's just something about this that I really enjoy, and I can't explain clearly why. Any help? Of course, I loved Subaru trying to write a love letter to Kamui earlier in the fic; it didn't seem like him, but it really was perfect. Very, very entertaining.
I think that's it. Some of the stuff mentioned quite clearly conveys an idea and makes you think, while some of the stuff is just plain funny. The dialogue is good as a whole and so is the writing, though you can quite clearly pick out a few typos that the author neglected to see. In that respect, it reminds me of my own writing! Ah well, bad, bad. Anyway, it's quite forgiveable. The fact that the chapters were semi-lengthy and there were 10+ of them made me happy because...well, I'm really enjoying this!
To get to the point, there's just...something about this fic that I can't quite put my finger on. Something...indefineable? Indescribeable? Elusive? Am I just inarticulate today?
I suppose the point could be that I really like it, and I can't clearly express why. Someone read it and help me out here, please! :) A reviewer, Adrienne, hit close with: One thing I noticed very early on is how real and convincing the characters' thoughts and dialogue are. The love letter, even, yes the love letter. Hikari Kage did, too, in her review of chapter three.
I have had several readers tell me how off-base and "weird-feeling" this work is, which was the flavor for which I was aiming. Wasn't this what I had been running around in circles trying to describe? (From TrenchKamen's ff.net profile)
Swishy is, like, my new favorite word, by the way. On another note, I'm not ruling anything out when it comes to Seishirou. Truth or lie? It could go either way, I suppose. Very gripping anyway. And his driving in chapter fifteen reminded me severely of setospuppyjou's father...
On another, very related subject: Myth-Busting the One-Eyed Monster. Oh God, I can't get enough of the eye jokes...! Actually very informational.